Feedback Reflection:
I had a variety of comments of my previous elevator pitch. One said that I was a bit awkward when talking in front of the camera, I mean I do not disagree at all. It is weird when you are taking a selfie video that is not a snap chat of some sorts. He gave me the advice to act as if I was in a business setting and hopefully that helped. I also was told that I had a good opening hook which was good to know. If you do not have a good opening hook you loose interest and if you loose interest from the potential investor or the potential client. Since this product idea is targeted towards college students and young professionals that can be spending money in a variety of ways which they do not know, like a study service or 2 different Netflix accounts. They like how I targeted the hook more towards college students.
Changes:
I mainly worked on not looking so awkward in front of the camera. Also I made sure to connect to the audience a bit more and make the hook a bit more engaging.
This pitch was much better! I really like how you emphasized the benefits- getting money back and understanding the subscriptions. I would suggest adding how you will make money, why your app works, and why they really need your app as opposed to other ways of keeping track of their subscriptions. Also, try standing a bit farther from the camera with natural light so the video is better quality. Good job! I know how uncomfortable it can be talking into the camera, but it gets better with practice :)
ReplyDeleteIt is super awkward just talking into a camera, but I can tell that you worked on it in this video and it was good! The hook is great because it is just too true, I use my bank app more than almost any other just because I constantly have to make sure my card doesn't get declined. Directing the pitch at college students is definitely the way to go I think. Nice job
ReplyDeleteIt is definitely awkward talking into the camera, but you can see that you practiced to make it better this time. It took me a couple tries to hone my own elevator pitch this time. I can definitely relate to your hook. I notice that I always spend waste money on account subscriptions that I never intended to keep. I accidentally left my study edge account open over summer and I got stuck paying for three months of study edge when I didn’t need it.
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