Feedback: One of the things that stood out to in the
feedback was that I needed to focus on was the quality of the video, I thought
my computer webcam/mic would be good enough but this time I tried to use my
phone and maybe that ended up working out a little bit better. Also, I was
surprised to see that a lot of people thought that this assignment is a bit
awkward just for the fact that we are kind of just talking to no one and can’t
interact with them completely.
Changes: This time Instead of using my computer webcam to
film the video I used my iPhone. Also, I re-worked the hook a bit to make it
more relevant because last night I overdrew on one of my debit cards because
of an account subscription, that I forgot about. I am also including how it
will work once it is downloaded onto your phone and how you will be able to
save money.
Josh, you made some great changes this time! I really appreciated your confidence, examples and qualifications. Your specific example that related to your own life was helpful to create a relevancy and relatability to your pitch. I would say, try setting up your phone on a high shelf so that you can move around a bit and not just sit still. Great job! Better quality.
ReplyDeleteHey, you definitely made some good changes that I think helped fully develop your elevator pitch! I liked the new and improved hook at the beginning, relating the opportunity back to your own experience can help to draw in potential investors/mentors and shows that you actually have a passion from the product that you want to create. The overall video quality is definitely better off of your phone rather than with the computer webcam as well!
ReplyDeleteThe hook at the beginning was incredible! I also liked how you indicated a personal experience. I like your effort and dedication to the time and usage of this future app. This app will be incredible for college students who suffer from paying bills. Your new and improved pitch really stood out to me.
ReplyDeleteHey Josh, I thought you really nailed the pitch this go around. Your hook at the beginning is really unique in that it draws from a personal experience relating to your product. It goes to show that you are continually looking to find improvements or areas to exploit with your product. Keep up the hard work and love the idea.
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